Today I'm entering the First Kiss Contest on Miss Snark's First Victim Blog:
http://misssnarksfirstvictim.blogspot.com/2015/02/first-kiss-critique-round-early-info.html
http://misssnarksfirstvictim.blogspot.com/2015/02/first-kiss-critique-round-early-info.html
What this entails is a 250-word snippet detailing the first kiss in the book, with a super short intro for lead-in purposes only.
My entry:
Excerpt
from HOW TO DATE DEAD GUYS, by Ann M. Noser
(How they met: Emma tried to raise Mike Carlson
from the dead after he drowned. Jake came back instead, and changed all her
plans.)
"You're gonna to leave me…" I whisper.
Jake sighs. "Emma, we've both known this all
along. I've been living on borrowed time, in a way."
My stomach sinks. "Please don't leave. I
think I've been asleep my whole life, and I'm finally just waking up."
Jake cocks his head and crinkles his eyes. He has
no idea what I'm saying, and I've no idea why
I'm saying it.
"It's just…" Tears fall down my cheeks,
and I swipe at them. "If you leave, I'll go back to being who I was
before, and I'm so tired of being me.
I'm boring."
"I never thought you were boring. Annoying, of course, yes, but not
boring."
"Shut up!" I swing at him and lose my
balance.
Jake catches me and wraps me in a tight hug,
patting my back much too vigorously.
"Jake, you're squishing me," I squeak.
He relaxes his hold. I gaze at his face.
Our eyes lock. Everything else turns fuzzy. The Christmas
lights dim and the music fades.
We just stand there breathing for a moment, and
then I kiss him.
Jake breaks my hold. "Emma, I don't know
about this."
"Shhhh, it's all right," I say and I
kiss him again.
We slide into the room and fall onto my bed.
***Thirty Entries are chosen by lottery for public critique, to be published Wednesday, February 11th. Wish me luck!
Happy Valentine's Day.
Congratulations on being selected! That's great.
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